My First Novel is Full of Action but the Sequel Only Hints At It

Ellesmere, my first novel shows the reader everything, making them voyeurs, but because my second manuscript Leeds, recount some the same events I tell it as it affected these characters. I never questioned this method or doubted the rightness of it until I sent it out and an agent suggested I write it more as an action.

I did the re-write with the hope of landing the agent, but I did not like the story as much and decided to keep it as is. Foolish? Perhaps, but I figured if I didn’t like my own book, then what would have been the point? But it did get me to consider acquiring an editor.

Right away, I wanted a man for I felt he would allow a well-roundedness to my novels, giving it an authentic male voice, but then my sister pointed out that my target audience were women in search of fantasy. So now, I’m looking for someone to make my intent clear and offer critical guidance.

All my very best,

Simone